Antigone Cadmus

Eh. Meh. Goodness. This is twelve and a half pages! You can't honestly expect someone to review all of that. I'm sorry, but I can't bring my instructor self to ...

Yay! Edited! This is much, much better. We had just got home from the party and Logan was spending a couple of days here. Kind of a quick beginning. You ...

Hello, thefireinmeisJC! I'm Sakura and I'll be your reviewer today. Who knows what the consequences of an unanswered command could be Knows is present tense. Change it to knew. its ...

Hi, Overlord! Welcome to YWS! It's a great place to get your writing critiqued, but you should critique other's writing as well! When you post a piece of your own ...

Hi, lordgluman! I'm not Finnish, but your poem is still pretty good. Onto the review: Check your meter. It's a bit off at times if not non-existent. glorious Swedish and ...

Wow! This was really good. I haven't read your poetry, but this is an excellent piece of writing Home page I think you need to capitalize page as well. disection-picking-up-poo-and-looking-at-genitals

This is pretty good. I don't really know poetry very well, though :). It's better than I could do. And the star that at me gaze Maybe it's just me, ...

I cannot even begin to edit this! There is too much! Let me give you some hints: -use punctuation -always capitalize I -break up sentences -capitalize the beginning of sentences ...

Hi, again! Okay, you still have a problem with your tenses: It is a wonderful day, New Year. It gave a sense that you are free in this world. No ...

Onto part two: I seemed to have grown up so much. Seem shouldn't be in the past tense. year 1934 I'm pretty sure you said it was 1933 in Part ...

Kirsten beat me to the nit-picks! Oh, well. I guess I'll have to review plot. -The title is too cute. "Hanna's Holocaust". Lovely. Please change it. -She writes much too ...

Hello, Fox! People will fill the streets yet the night was already decorated with different colours. Honestly, this sentence makes absolutely no sense. Actually this is the first time I ...

First let me say i'm terribly sorry for happen to you. Good story, but a tad cliche. He did not just say that! It's non-fiction! It's not cliche! Adam, you ...

Hey, Adam! I'm Sakura and I'll be your reviewer today. Lol. I come from a family of drunkards as well. My Uncle went to rehab and stayed in Eric Clapton's ...

Hello! I'm Sakura and I'll be your reviewer for today. Welcome to YWS. It's a great place to have your writing critiqued, so you should return the favor! It's a ...